CELPIP Writing Task 1 Email - Application Email

For tutoring and help with CELPIP preparation, please call or text me, Angela, at 613-614-6460 Website: www.ottawa-english.com 📝Writing Correction Service: https://ottawa-english.com/english-writing-correction-service/ Hi and welcome to Ottawa English. I’m Angela and today we’re looking at how to get a high score for an application email in CELPIP Writing Task 1. While it’s fairly common to worry about vocabulary as you prepare for the CELPIP test, keep in mind that there are a lot of ways you can compensate for any vocabulary issues. We’re going to take a look at those today. CELPIP examiners use this rubric to score each of the speaking tasks, and clearly, vocabulary really isn’t the only thing they’re looking at. It’s just one of four categories. Even within the vocabulary category, there are several factors that contribute to your score. Obviously, word choice matters, but this one here,’ suitable use of words and phrases’ means you’re flexible enough to find an alternative way to say something when you can’t think of the exact word. This one here ‘range of words and phrases’, means that you don’t just use the same word over and over again. This one, ‘precision and accuracy’ means you use the tools of language efficiency. Let’s take a look at a response to this prompt where we’re asked to write an email applying for a job as a waitress. This is the response I’ve prepared. Stop the video for a moment and read my response. Typically, we would ‘highlight’ our strengths, but if you’re uncomfortable with that word, you could say bring or draw to your attention. Instead of ‘thrilled’, you could say happy or delighted. For ‘extends beyond its food all the way down to its staff’ you could just say ‘includes both the food and staff’ and , if you didn’t know the word for ‘catering’, food management would do just as nicely. And finally, I used broad here, but you could say wide. With any of those alternatives, I would still get a good score for vocabulary because all my choices are appropriate. I get my score for a range of suitable use of words and phrases from this ‘attached’, restaurant’s authenticity, customer focused, be a good fit, and this very eloquent correlative conjunction ‘both lunch and dinner shifts’. For precision and accuracy, I pick up a lot of points for these possessives, these participle adjectives and these parallels. They all go a long way to giving me a good precision and accuracy score because they make my language so efficient. Okay, so, as you can see there’s a lot more to getting your vocabulary score than just knowing specific words and phrases. Now, let’s take a look at how we can pick up points in the other sections. For Content and coherence, I’ve zeroed in on two ideas with the first one being about by how my language skills would contribute to the atmosphere, and the second about my recognition of my responsibilities in maintaining a good environment. My ideas are good quality because they’re what an employer might be looking for in a cover letter. I’ve organized my ideas into two paragraphs and then introduced each on before expanding on it with plenty of details. For my grammatical range and accuracy score, I’ve formatted my email carefully with an appropriate salutation, an introduction identifying the purpose of my email, my two ideas, and then a conclusion highlighting my availability. I often see emails that start with a name, but you mustn’t introduce yourself. In the English-speaking world readers are expected to look at the salutation to find out who the email’s from – and we all know that! You’ll notice that I’ve left a line-space between each part of my email. That’s important! Don’t forget to do it. For my connections and transitions, I’ve used plenty of subordinating conjunctions and conjunctive adverbs In terms of grammar, I’ve used a combination of simple present, present continuous and present perfect tenses along with the 2nd conditional. My sentences’ subjects, verbs and complements are all in the right order. For sentence variety, I’ve used a referents or relative clauses, gerund and infinitive clauses and a couple of correlative conjunctions. When we add these subordinating conjunctions and conjunctive adverbs, the examiner can see just how comfortable I am using complex sentences to express myself. My spelling and punctuation is accurate. And now we get to the last section – task fulfillment. My response is relevant and complete because it offers the reader a couple of good reasons to choose me to fill his vacancy. It’s complete because does everything the prompt asks me to do. The tone is appropriate. With all these second conditionals, it’s very polite, and it’s the right length at about 200 words. I hope that’s given you some ideas about ways you can pick up points for a good score even if you don’t have the world’s best vocabulary. Thanks for watching.

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